Hi, all. Just joined, finally. Thanks for taking the trouble to
organise all this. Some thoughts in no particular order:
1. Glad to see that Deepak added the _dates_ to the top of each page
of the Web site. I was meaning to mention that omission, earlier. Good!
2. The name is given as LinuxDemo Day in the HTML header, and Linux
Demo Day elsewhere. Needs a quick fix.
3. Am I the only one who found it odd that a "day" might be seven days
long?
4. "We are no longer accepting entries from LUGs as the date of the
event is too close." Hmm. You could have said "any new listings will
be too late to receive materials from our sponsors", but why also bar
listing the events themselves? (No, my ox isn't being gored: I'm
running the BALUG/CABAL event you have listed at
http://www.linuxdemo.org/view_lug.php?id=134, one of our long-running
series of monthly InstallFest/demos in front of several thousand people
each time.)
5. (From http://www.linuxdemo.org/staff.shtml:) "End user [1]
application list. Bill is working on a application list to handout [2]
to demo visitors that will list Windows applications along with Linux
apps that serve the same purpose." Hmm. It may seem like a cavil, but
isn't one of the biggest problems of Linux evangelism folks' insistence
on a Windows-centric perspective?
I have found it so, and try to stress Unix thinking up-front: Computers
are network-centric, tasks are long-lived and can run one place and
image somewhere else (X is a network protocol), the user is in control
and can customise without ever affecting other users, computers are
fast and stable. Like that.
Yes, those _are_ subtle, long-term points to get across. All the more
reason to start early: Sure, show them Star Office, but don't forget
networked DOOM, Enlightenment themes, GIMP's Script-Fu, and exported
X displays, because they're a Unix advantage with _no_ Windows
equivalent. _And_ far more interesting.
6. (From http://www.linuxdemo.org/mail.shtml:) "You can use the
following form to subscribe/unsubscribe to the mailing lists." Well,
yes, but how about telling people they can send "subscribe linuxdemo" as
body text to [EMAIL PROTECTED]? (The former alternative is
nice for Webheads, but talking to majordomo directly is more
straight-forward.)
7. (Throughout the Web site:) You have "web" in lower case. However,
it's short for "World-Wide Web", and is a proper noun.
While I'm at it.... You guys can use some copy-editing in a whole lot
of small areas:
8. (From http://www.linuxdemo.org/staff.shtml:) "He is also the
maintainer of the french web site." "French" is a proper noun. Ditto
for "spanish" and "german", below.)
9. (From http://www.linuxdemo.org/home.shtml:) "...a concurrent
worldwide demonstration of the Linux Operation System...." "Operating
system", here, is not a proper noun. Usage also appears on
http://www.linuxdemo.org/about.shtml.
10. (From http://www.linuxdemo.org/about.shtml:) "work(and play!)"
You need a space in there.
11. (Same page:) "wonderfull". Nope: One "l".
12. (Same page:) "RedHat" Nope. Red Hat. (Also on
http://www.linuxdemo.org/faq.shtml and http://www.linuxdemo.org/press/.)
13. (Same page:) "Linux Demo Day will take place between September
12th-19th." Not 12-18, as stated elsewhere?
14. (From http://www.linuxdemo.org/faq.shtml:) "There have been nation
wide installfests...." "Nation wide" is a compound adjective.
Hyphenate.
15. (From http://www.linuxdemo.org/legal.shtml:) "ammount". Nope:
Amount. Also "employement" should be "employment".
16. (Same page:) In "OAO Service, Inc", "Inc" is an abbreviation
and needs a period. Also "afore mentioned" should be "aforementioned".
17. (From http://www.linuxdemo.org/mail.shtml:) "It is meant for those
that are not interested in the ongoing dicussions...." Use "who"
instead of "that" when speaking of _people_.
[1] "End user" functions as a compound adjective, here, modifying
"application", and therefore should be hyphenated.
[2] Should be "hand out". "Handout" is OK as a noun, but the verb
is two words. This usage also appears in the first paragraph of
http://www.linuxdemo.org/home.shtml.
--
Cheers,
Rick Moen Potestatem capite!
rick (at) linuxmafia.com
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