I haven't seen anyone as picky about proper English since I
read the Unabomber's manifesto :) There's no fault in trying
to help though; if I ever need some one to grammer check a thesis,
you're first on my list :)
-Chris
> Hi, all. Just joined, finally. Thanks for taking the trouble to
> organise all this. Some thoughts in no particular order:
>
> 1. Glad to see that Deepak added the _dates_ to the top of each page
> of the Web site. I was meaning to mention that omission, earlier. Good!
>
> 2. The name is given as LinuxDemo Day in the HTML header, and Linux
> Demo Day elsewhere. Needs a quick fix.
>
> 3. Am I the only one who found it odd that a "day" might be seven days
> long?
>
> 4. "We are no longer accepting entries from LUGs as the date of the
> event is too close." Hmm. You could have said "any new listings will
> be too late to receive materials from our sponsors", but why also bar
> listing the events themselves? (No, my ox isn't being gored: I'm
> running the BALUG/CABAL event you have listed at
> http://www.linuxdemo.org/view_lug.php?id=134, one of our long-running
> series of monthly InstallFest/demos in front of several thousand people
> each time.)
>
> 5. (From http://www.linuxdemo.org/staff.shtml:) "End user [1]
> application list. Bill is working on a application list to handout [2]
> to demo visitors that will list Windows applications along with Linux
> apps that serve the same purpose." Hmm. It may seem like a cavil, but
> isn't one of the biggest problems of Linux evangelism folks' insistence
> on a Windows-centric perspective?
>
> I have found it so, and try to stress Unix thinking up-front: Computers
> are network-centric, tasks are long-lived and can run one place and
> image somewhere else (X is a network protocol), the user is in control
> and can customise without ever affecting other users, computers are
> fast and stable. Like that.
>
> Yes, those _are_ subtle, long-term points to get across. All the more
> reason to start early: Sure, show them Star Office, but don't forget
> networked DOOM, Enlightenment themes, GIMP's Script-Fu, and exported
> X displays, because they're a Unix advantage with _no_ Windows
> equivalent. _And_ far more interesting.
>
> 6. (From http://www.linuxdemo.org/mail.shtml:) "You can use the
> following form to subscribe/unsubscribe to the mailing lists." Well,
> yes, but how about telling people they can send "subscribe linuxdemo" as
> body text to [EMAIL PROTECTED]? (The former alternative is
> nice for Webheads, but talking to majordomo directly is more
> straight-forward.)
>
> 7. (Throughout the Web site:) You have "web" in lower case. However,
> it's short for "World-Wide Web", and is a proper noun.
>
> While I'm at it.... You guys can use some copy-editing in a whole lot
> of small areas:
>
> 8. (From http://www.linuxdemo.org/staff.shtml:) "He is also the
> maintainer of the french web site." "French" is a proper noun. Ditto
> for "spanish" and "german", below.)
>
> 9. (From http://www.linuxdemo.org/home.shtml:) "...a concurrent
> worldwide demonstration of the Linux Operation System...." "Operating
> system", here, is not a proper noun. Usage also appears on
> http://www.linuxdemo.org/about.shtml.
>
> 10. (From http://www.linuxdemo.org/about.shtml:) "work(and play!)"
> You need a space in there.
>
> 11. (Same page:) "wonderfull". Nope: One "l".
>
> 12. (Same page:) "RedHat" Nope. Red Hat. (Also on
> http://www.linuxdemo.org/faq.shtml and http://www.linuxdemo.org/press/.)
>
> 13. (Same page:) "Linux Demo Day will take place between September
> 12th-19th." Not 12-18, as stated elsewhere?
>
> 14. (From http://www.linuxdemo.org/faq.shtml:) "There have been nation
> wide installfests...." "Nation wide" is a compound adjective.
> Hyphenate.
>
> 15. (From http://www.linuxdemo.org/legal.shtml:) "ammount". Nope:
> Amount. Also "employement" should be "employment".
>
> 16. (Same page:) In "OAO Service, Inc", "Inc" is an abbreviation
> and needs a period. Also "afore mentioned" should be "aforementioned".
>
> 17. (From http://www.linuxdemo.org/mail.shtml:) "It is meant for those
> that are not interested in the ongoing dicussions...." Use "who"
> instead of "that" when speaking of _people_.
>
> [1] "End user" functions as a compound adjective, here, modifying
> "application", and therefore should be hyphenated.
>
> [2] Should be "hand out". "Handout" is OK as a noun, but the verb
> is two words. This usage also appears in the first paragraph of
> http://www.linuxdemo.org/home.shtml.
>
> --
> Cheers,
> Rick Moen Potestatem capite!
> rick (at) linuxmafia.com
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