Sorry, this reads too much like stream of conscious writing, there is no connected thought that I can see. It sounds like this is just as it popped out of your mind, with no consderation and no revision. Apologies if you did revise, but it doesn't read like it.
Needs a lot of work before it comes across as poetry, or prose for that matter.
And what happened to the shift key? Leave missing caps to ee cummings.
Jane Bhandari
hansa thapliyal <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote:
hansa thapliyal <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote:
money math math falling short fear. my sheets are soft
they let me sink i try to hold my palm myself i
recognise the wooden shapes long upon my wall.
'he's too high the seated man' i bring him down,
gently dust his surround ( what 'gentle'? my fingers
are clumsy on the lattice in a quiet corner, they poke
out dust they let it be. i put him up again in vision
of my eye.
you saw this long ago the felt repose inside the frame
you understood it. you knew strain before me
( i see the picture you gave me)
does this text connect or is it too much of a personal
letter?
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