Barbara.Lundquist at sun.com wrote:

> Karen, Ethan: Creating an Image pages 28-30
> 1 - Test the command examples for technical accuracy.

"Using Checkpointing to Create an Image" section - a nit -
The first two sentences don't flow well together, maybe its
because first has a double negative?  Could we rewrite
this to something like: "You don't have to use checkpointing
to build and image, however you may prefer to pause and
restart ..."

The Note that follows - nit - again the first two sentences
don't flow.  Suggestion: "The checkpointing feature is enabled
by default in the manifest file but requires a ZFS dataset, or a
mount point that correlates to a ZFS dataset, to be specified as
the build area."

In the Example in the "Creating an Image Using Checkpoint
Options" section.  I don't see the file "slim_cd.xml" file as being
delivered by DC anymore, but I do see a "slim_cd_x86.xml"
Does this example need to be updated?



thanks,
-ethan


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