On 10/02/18 07:04, The Wanderer wrote: > On 2018-02-09 at 12:49, rhkra...@gmail.com wrote: > >> On Friday, February 09, 2018 08:58:24 AM Curt wrote: >> >>> There once was a hacker from Bali >>> Who did her forensics on Kali >>> One fine day to be rude >>> She modeled in the nude >>> Got fingered by Tom and Dick and Sally. >> I'm not a poet, and forget any rules that I may once have supposed to learn, >> but I think this sounds just slightly better (minor wordsmithing): >> >> >> There once was a hacker from Bali >> Who did her forensics on Kali >> One day to be rude >> She posed in the nude >> Got fingered by Tom, Dick, and Sally. > The meter and scansion of that are better, but the first syllable of the > rhyming word isn't consistent. > > The "a" in at least one (and I think both) of "Bali" and "Kali" matches > one in "call", "fall", "mall", or "wall", or the "o" in "doll"; by > contrast, the "a" in "Sally" matches the one in "pal", "Hal", or > "shall".
Hmm - accents. For me, call fall mall and wall don't rhyme with doll. And neither rhymes with the first syllable of Kali or Bali (or Mali); they rhyme with Harley :-) Richard
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