Thanks for the review, Ben! Authors, have you seen the editorial comments? jari
On Mar 21, 2014, at 9:24 PM, Ben Campbell <b...@nostrum.com> wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on > Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at > < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Please wait for direction from your document shepherd > or AD before posting a new version of the draft. > > Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-64share-09 > Reviewer: Ben Campbell > Review Date: 2014-03-21 > IETF LC End Date: long time ago > IESG Telechat date: 2014-03-27 > > Note: I somehow missed this assignment at last call time. Therefore this > review serves as both a last call and an IESG telechat review. > > Summary: This draft is mostly ready for publication as an informational RFC. > I have a few editorial comments that might be worth considering prior to > publication. > > Major issues: None > > Minor issues: None > > Nits/editorial comments: > > -- Section 1, paragraph 1: > > Can you elaborate on what it means to "extend" The prefix to a LAN link? Are > we talking about routing IPv6 traffic from other local devices (on the LAN) > across the 3gpp link, for example, like one might do when tethering devices > to a phone or mobile hotspot? > Can you offer a reference for "the 3GPP specification"? > > Can you offer a reference for "the 3GPP specification"? > > -- paragraph 2: "This can be achieved by receiving the Router Advertisement > (RA) [RFC4861] announced globally unique /64 IPv6 prefix from the 3GPP radio > interface and then advertising" > > What does these things. The UE? > > Please expand RA on first mention. > > -- section 3, R-1: > > Please expand SLAAC on first use. > > -- section 4.2, 1st paragraph: "The 3GPP RA /64 prefix information is used to > configure NDP on the LAN and assigns itself an address on the LAN link." > > The prefix information assigns itself an address? I don't think that's what > you mean to say. > > -- section 4.2, step 7: > > Please expand DAD on first use. > > > > _______________________________________________ > Gen-art mailing list > Gen-art@ietf.org > https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
