Dear Ben, all,
Many thanks for your review. An updated I-D has been submitted. Please see inline. > -----Original Message----- > From: Ben Campbell [mailto:b...@nostrum.com] > Sent: Friday, March 21, 2014 8:25 PM > To: draft-ietf-v6ops-64share....@tools.ietf.org > Cc: gen-art@ietf.org Team (gen-art@ietf.org) > Subject: Gen-ART LC/Telechat Review of draft-ietf-v6ops- > 64share-09 > > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For > background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < > http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. > > Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD > before posting a new version of the draft. > > Document: draft-ietf-v6ops-64share-09 > Reviewer: Ben Campbell > Review Date: 2014-03-21 > IETF LC End Date: long time ago > IESG Telechat date: 2014-03-27 > > Note: I somehow missed this assignment at last call time. > Therefore this review serves as both a last call and an IESG > telechat review. > > Summary: This draft is mostly ready for publication as an > informational RFC. I have a few editorial comments that might > be worth considering prior to publication. > > Major issues: None > > Minor issues: None > > Nits/editorial comments: > > -- Section 1, paragraph 1: > > Can you elaborate on what it means to "extend" The prefix to > a LAN link? Are we talking about routing IPv6 traffic from > other local devices (on the LAN) across the 3gpp link, for > example, like one might do when tethering devices to a phone > or mobile hotspot? Yes, this is the case. > Can you offer a reference for "the 3GPP specification"? > > Can you offer a reference for "the 3GPP specification"? Done. > -- paragraph 2: "This can be achieved by receiving the Router > Advertisement (RA) [RFC4861] announced globally unique /64 > IPv6 prefix from the 3GPP radio interface and then > advertising" > > What does these things. The UE? Yes, the UE. Ref to the UE has been added. > Please expand RA on first mention. Done. > > -- section 3, R-1: > > Please expand SLAAC on first use. Done. > -- section 4.2, 1st paragraph: "The 3GPP RA /64 prefix > information is used to configure NDP on the LAN and assigns > itself an address on the LAN link." > > The prefix information assigns itself an address? I don't > think that's what you mean to say. Fixed, please review. > -- section 4.2, step 7: > > Please expand DAD on first use. Done. Cheers, Ales ________________________________ Zásady komunikace, které společnost T-Mobile Czech Republic a.s. užívá při sjednávání smluv, jsou uvedeny zde http://www.t-mobile.cz/zasady. Není-li v zásadách uvedeno jinak, nepředstavuje tato zpráva konečný návrh na uzavření či změnu smlouvy ani přijetí takového návrhu. The communication principles which T-Mobile Czech Republic a.s. applies when negotiating contracts are defined here http://www.t-mobile.cz/principles. Unless otherwise stated in the principles, this message does not constitute the final offer to contract or an amendment of a contract or acceptance of such offer.
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