Hi, I can confirm this version addresses my OPS DIR review comments. Thanks,
Sheng >-----Original Message----- >From: Jiangyuanlong >Sent: Friday, December 11, 2015 7:17 PM >To: Russ Housley; Stephen Farrell; Jari Arkko; Sheng Jiang; Ben Campbell; Barry >Leiba; Alvaro Retana (aretana); Stewart Bryant >Cc: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree....@ietf.org; IETF Gen-ART; The IESG; >BRUNGARD, DEBORAH A >Subject: Resolution on comments of draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10 > >Hi all, > >Thanks a lot for your reviews. >Based on all the comments received during the IESG evaluation, we have >prepared a tentative version 11 for this draft. >We believe all the comments are resolved, but please check whether you have >any concerns with the texts in this version. > >If there are no further comments, we will upload it as the formal revision 11 >version. > >Best regards, >Yuanlong > >> -----Original Message----- >> From: BRUNGARD, DEBORAH A [mailto:db3...@att.com] >> Sent: Thursday, December 03, 2015 11:03 PM >> To: Jari Arkko >> Cc: Jiangyuanlong; Russ Housley; draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree....@ietf.org; >IETF >> Gen-ART; IETF >> Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10 >> >> Hi Jari, >> >> Yes, we'll be doing a new revision for addressing other comments. >> >> I've asked for today's telechat if no discusses to mark it as approved, >> revised >> draft needed. >> >> Much thanks Russ for your review! >> >> Deborah >> >> >> Sent from my iPhone >> >> > On Dec 3, 2015, at 1:08 PM, Jari Arkko <jari.ar...@piuha.net> wrote: >> > >> > Many thanks for your detailed review, Russ! >> > >> > Yuanlong, will there be a new draft version or other edits before the draft >> > is approved? >> > >> > Jari >> > >> >> On 17 Nov 2015, at 00:53, Jiangyuanlong <jiangyuanl...@huawei.com> >> wrote: >> >> >> >> Russ, >> >> >> >> Thanks a lot for your review and good observations. >> >> Please see my comments in line. >> >> >> >> Best regards, >> >> Yuanlong >> >> >> >>> -----Original Message----- >> >>> From: Russ Housley [mailto:hous...@vigilsec.com] >> >>> Sent: Saturday, November 14, 2015 1:28 AM >> >>> To: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree....@ietf.org >> >>> Cc: IETF Gen-ART; IETF >> >>> Subject: Gen-ART Review of draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10 >> >>> >> >>> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area >Review >> >>> Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the >IESG for >> >>> the IETF Chair. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd >or AD >> >>> before posting a new version of the draft. >> >>> >> >>> For more information, please see the FAQ at >> >>> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. >> >>> >> >>> Document: draft-ietf-l2vpn-vpls-pe-etree-10 >> >>> Reviewer: Russ Housley >> >>> Review Date: 2015-11-13 >> >>> IETF LC End Date: 2015-11-24 >> >>> IESG Telechat date: unknown >> >>> >> >>> Summary: Almost Ready >> >>> >> >>> >> >>> Major Concerns: None >> >>> >> >>> >> >>> Minor Concerns: >> >>> >> >>> Sections 4.1 and 5.3.1 inclues a reference to [802.1Q-2011]. Should >this be >> >>> the 2014 version of the document? If not, please add the informative >> >>> reference for [802.1Q-2011]. >> >> [YJ] Yes, all these should refer to [802.1Q-2014]. >> >> >> >>> >> >>> Other Editorial Comments: >> >>> >> >>> The Abstract should appear on the title page. >> >> [YJ] OK. >> >> >> >>> Section 3 needs a reference for MEF 6.1: >> >>> s/Specification MEF 6.1/Specification MEF 6.1 [MEF6.1]/ Also, [MEF6.1] >> >>> needs to be added as a normative reference. >> >> [YJ] All these will be updated to MEF 6.2. >> >> >> >>> Section 3 needs a reference for IEEE 802.1Q-2003: >> >>> s/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003/B.1.3 of IEEE 802.1Q-2003 [802.1Q-2003]/ >Also, >> >>> please add an informative reference for [802.1Q-2003]. >> >> [YJ] Yes, we will add an informative reference for [802.1Q-2003]. >> >> >> >>> Third level section headings do not have space between the section >number >> >>> and the section title. For example: >> >>> s/5.3.1.PW Processing/5.3.1. PW Processing/ >> >> [YJ] OK. >> >> >> >>> In Fig 4, there is room to shift the figure to the right, this will >> >>> allow the >"AC" >> >>> labels to fit better on the left: >> >>> >> >>> +----------------------------------------+ >> >>> | VPLS-capable PE model | >> >>> | +---------------+ +------+ | >> >>> | | |==========|TVSI-1|------------ >> >>> +---+ AC | | ------------ |------------ PWs >> >>> |CE |----------| Bridge ------------ |------------ >> >>> +---+ | | | Root & +------+ | >> >>> | | Module | Leaf VLAN o | >> >>> | | | o | >> >>> | | | o | >> >>> | | | o | >> >>> | | | o | >> >>> +---+ AC | | | VLAN-n +------+ | >> >>> |CE |----------| ------------VSI-n |------------- >> >>> +---+ | | |==========| >|------------- PWs >> >>> | | | ^ | >|------------- >> >>> | +---------------+ | +------+ | >> >>> | | | >> >>> +-------------------------|--------------+ >> >>> LAN emulation Interface >> >>> >> >>> Figure 4 A VPLS PE Model for E-Tree with a Single T-VSI >> >> >> >> >> >> [YJ] OK. >> >> >> >> _______________________________________________ >> >> Gen-art mailing list >> >> Gen-art@ietf.org >> >> https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art >> > _______________________________________________ Gen-art mailing list Gen-art@ietf.org https://www.ietf.org/mailman/listinfo/gen-art
