On Mon, Dec 17, 2012 at 1:25 AM, Simonas Leleiva
<simonas.lele...@gmail.com>wrote:

>
> { And thanks to a mysterious unnamed someone who changed "mold" into
> "get" :) Yes, my non biased proof-reader also did not want mold in
> their tea :D }
>
> +1

>
> NemoMobile
>
>
> The future of mobile computing is in our hands - today.


(sounds too long to me compared to the original, was just the 'computing'
word added?)...

>
> Presenting Linux for your mobile.
>
> Feature rich. Free and open source. First of its kind.
>
> The heart of NemoMobile is a lightweight Linux distro called Mer. It
> can power a wide range of devices: from interactive alarm clocks to
> car entertainment systems and smart TVs.
>

Now this seems to say much more about Mer, but if I'm just arriving I'll
ask "So what's that NemoMobile??".  Also, heart can
be interested differently by different developers / landers on the page.

>
> Become a NemoMobile developer and enjoy the freedom. Nemo-power your
> mobile phone, tablet, LCD shopping list on your fridge, ... , and
> share the experience! If you get it to make tea, invite us! The more
>

-> Nemo power again to the uninitiated could be a bit problematic, so again
I'd suggest 'Use it to power your mobile phone,....,'.
-> "if you got it to make tea,.."

> users the merrier. The more feedback the better.
>
> It's fun, we're excited and a friendly community. Interested? Join us
> at IRC http://webchat.freenode.net/?channels=#nemomobile or leave a
> comment here. Let's influence the future of mobile, together!
>
>
'It's fun and we're a friendly community. " should be better. (drop
the excitement altogether)

-Sivan

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