Thanks Christine. I like that shot too, and it was a wrench to edit it out. But the RPS judges are very strict about repetition, and it is too similar to the shot which is currently the final one in the series - I don't think it adds anything to the essay, and it would slightly disrupt the rhythm, which is a slow closing in from the wide view to the very close up, then pulling back.
I have made another slide show with other candidate photos from Fez. I couldn't find anything else to be a clincher for that series, so I have started the 2nd section with a wide view of Fez to act as a full stop. This still needs to lose 7 pictures and be a balanced essay. I will probably be taken these photos to the workshop in just over a week. Again, I'd be pleased to hear people's comments: http://www.web-options.com/ARPS/ Bob > -----Original Message----- > From: [EMAIL PROTECTED] [mailto:[EMAIL PROTECTED] On > Behalf Of Christine Aguila > Sent: 15 October 2008 07:10 > To: Pentax-Discuss Mail List > Subject: Re: Fez - candidate essay for the RPS. Opinions please. > > Hi Bob: Boy, your 9 pic essay really is great. The > sequencing looks good > to me. You know, I really like this shot > http://www.web-options.com/Tanneries/content/_A039925_large.ht > ml, which is > not in your 2nd edit. Just a thought--really all the pics in > the 2nd edit > are great. I have no idea what to suggest for a "stronger clincher." > Clearly your RPS workshop will be of more help to you than I > just was. > Anyway, I think you're off to a great start. Really enjoyed > seeing these. > Cheers, Christine > > > ----- Original Message ----- > From: "Bob W" <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> > To: "'Pentax-Discuss Mail List'" <pdml@pdml.net> > Sent: Sunday, October 12, 2008 6:01 AM > Subject: Fez - candidate essay for the RPS. Opinions please. > > > >A couple of days ago I posted a first edit of the tanneries in Fez: > > http://www.web-options.com/Tanneries/ > > > > For the ARPS submission I need an essay of exactly 15 > pictures. I have > > decided that I will probably make 2 mini-essays, presented as a > > slideshow, one of which will be about the tanneries - 6-8 pictures. > > > > Here is my 2nd edit of the tanneries section, done as a > Flash gallery > > so you can see approximately how the slideshow will work: > > http://www.web-options.com/RPSTanneries/ > > > > I'd welcome your thoughts about the content, sequencing and > so on. It > > will need to lose some pictures, but I will take part in an RPS > > workshop later this month where I will discuss what is strongest - > > your views are important to me though (I sound like a call centre!). > > > > My main feeling about this one is that it really needs a stronger > > clincher to close the set. > > > > Fire away! -- PDML Pentax-Discuss Mail List PDML@pdml.net http://pdml.net/mailman/listinfo/pdml_pdml.net to UNSUBSCRIBE from the PDML, please visit the link directly above and follow the directions.
