Thank you Martin for your kind words. Harry's edit also makes sense,
especially as I imagine architects may not be the only copyright
holders, even for buildings.
Tweaking the text of this brochure is a great example of the power of
collaborative editing.
If you're not familiar with them, Tony1 has devised some great exercises
in redundancy. I have found them quite instructive in the past, and
they could be a useful training tool. As he states, "Redundancy, rather
than poor grammar and spelling, is the biggest source of problems in prose."
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tony1/Redundancy_exercises:_removing_fluff_from_your_writing
best wishes
Edward Hands
Edwardx on WP etc
Edward's copyediting is a great improvement, and a nice illustration
of how, >95% of the time people say they want more space to write in,
what they actually want is fewer words. Thanks to all who contributed
to this and especially Stevie, of course: I'm sure it will be very useful.
On 16 September 2013 17:33, HJ Mitchell <hjmitch...@ymail.com
<mailto:hjmitch...@ymail.com>> wrote:
Edward's suggestions seem sensible to me, though I'd be happy with
either version.
I might also be inclined to remove "by the architect", especially
if we're using a sculpture as an example.
Harry Mitchell
http://enwp.org/User:HJ
Phone: 024 7698 0977
Skype: harry_j_mitchell
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