Hi ron... You ve deciphered it correctly...thr is jst one more idea....this is one of those moments when i fite wth myselff... and i resolve not to weaken up.. not to cry.. and each breath is a struggle.... and i tell myself tht i wnt cry...not ever... never again... and then the tear happens... memories evade...and jst like 'him' the tear repeats the same sequence... i relish it and hate myself for it... the ultimate humiliation.... the knowledge tht i m not being able to be strong despite all my resolutions....so the last lines ' i ask myself again.... i y...' reflects my surrender.. my humiliation... my ambivalence.... the dilemna of being in love wth with him despite being aware of wat he is...the dilemna of having perfect knowledge and not being able to use it as a shielld....the impotency of not being able to walk further or back... in either direction.... i like the way u ve been able to read in between the words.... thanks....: and thanks for your feedbak....its such a pleasure..... :)
--- ronnie banerjee <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > Hi Prerna! > My observations (though i really do not know what to > make of them):- > 1. The teardrop of a woman is male (addressed to as > "he" as opposed to the gender neutral "it") and so, > therefore, very much like a man leaves on the lurch > the very eye that has generated it - in short a > ditcher! > 2. The tear drop - presumably a result of grief - > is juxtaposed with words like smile, twinkle and > sparkle. > > The verdict is clear. U are describing a caress > which traces your cheek. The poignancy is that the > caress replicates the path of a tear - as if the > cause for great happiness is also the basis of > profound sorrow. Such is life i guess. > > I liked the poem whether i misunderstood it again or > not but i liked attempting to decipher it. > Ron > prerna rungta <[EMAIL PROTECTED]> wrote: > hi all.... here is another one from me... i ll be > appreciate if i get some feedback.... > specially from farah and ronnie... > It does have a title but i ve written it alongside > my > name...after the poem... > > > > Sometimes when we are alone.. > I try to hold him on... > but then he... > He, > the little twinkle tht sparkles my eyes... > traces his path down my cheek.. > stops for a split second... > brushes my lips... > smiles and dissappears.. > oblivious of whatever happens > to me.. the one left behind > And then Again > I ask myself > I.... > WHY?.... > > > Prerna > SOLITARY TEAR > > --- Farah Imran wrote: > > > I think I owe Mr.Vivek a thorough apology... > > > > Dear sir, I am heartily sorry for replying so > > viciously. But I have been in a very low mood for > > some days and your criticism sounded very jarring > to > > my over wrought nerves...I hope you will realize > > that I over-reacted because I felt that my emotion > > has been mocked. Now that I look back, I see that > > you did not intend it that way...but that is > always > > a problem with me, I leap first and look > > afterwards.I hope you will understand. > > > > And thankyou for such a sweet reconcilliatory note > > Ronnie. The mildness of your tone has made me > > realize that I did indeed reply very > viciously...my > > apologies again. > > And man am I happy or what to know that you have > > read "Harry Potter". I am a diehard Harry Potter > fan > > myself. > > > > This is the longest poem I have written to > date...I > > surely need more practice to get a hang of this > kind > > of writing. > > > > Regards, > > Farah. > > > > ronnie banerjee wrote: > > What is interesting in Farah's latest is > involvement > > of Harry Potter in the poem - The word "Dementor" > > has been used without fear and without > explanation. > > I love it. > > > > The critique of Vivek cannot be taken the way > Farah > > has taken it. I found the exchange between Farah > and > > Vivek most stimulating. Raw talent in the face of > > finely honed criticism (albeit slightly > patronising > > but well meaning at the end of the day). No, I > > daresay Vivek was certainly not being malicious. > > > > There comes a time when the critic's critique > itself > > gets criticised. I do think that Vivek got into > the > > issue of technique to such an extent that he > ignored > > the substance of the poem, which obviously is > about > > the devastation caused due to the recent > earthquake. > > In other words the poem is about the tyranny of > > nature and the abruptness of tragedy and > > devastation. It is important and terribly relevant > > because there is a lot of it that is happening all > > over - tsunami, hurricane Katrina, and now the > > earthquake. I was reading somewhere that nature > does > > not have a human heart. I also relate to Farah's > > confession that she would not be in a position to > > deal with the suddenness of such a calamity. I am > > able to discover a bit of meaning in Farah's > present > > poem as I have read a few of them now (I must > > confess I like reading most of them as they are > > mercifully short). Farah's poems draw heavy > reliance > > from nature and for her nature metaphorises her > > emotions to a large extent. For such a > > "pantheist" a sudden revelation of mother nature's > > meaningless cruelty must certainly be > inexplicable. > > > > Amazingly, I found the earthquake interesting too > > but for prosaic reasons. The seismological / > > territorial faultline, it would seem, coincides > > with the cultural and political one. How is that > for > > a modern pantheistic idiom. I think a poem can be > > attempted on this. > > Farah's stacatto style in the poem can be > criticised > > but it cannot be condemned. The style wishes to > > highlight the pain and the rough edges of her > > feelings. No doubt the poem has rough edges too. I > > don't think that she needs to rhyme or chyme her > > current poem. I do like it with its jagged and > > slightly rough hewn style. > > > > Regards all > > Ronnie > > > > > > > > --------------------------------- > > Yahoo! Music Unlimited - Access over 1 million > > songs. Try it free. > > > > > > __________________________________ > Yahoo! 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