> yeah the pseudo latin used in the spells is a bit > annoying. But still. The target audience is what, > aged 7 through 15 approximately? Nor do I think > that overly ornate writing is, in and of itself, > a good thing. There's a lot to be said for the > lean and elegant prose of Roger Zelazny or Ed > McBain. The woman who wrote the sample bit I > pasted is actually a friend of mine, but she's > wrong on this one.
The first chapter of my novel is pretty stark... intentionally so actually... The writing becomes more detailed / involved as the story progresses, although I think even at the end of it there have been very few of what I would consider "ornate" passages. Most of the language is pretty darn plain actually -- it's the situational aspect of the passages that really carries its meaning, like the passage where the main character mentions his only prior exposure to indians having been a plastic toy he played with as a child, and one of the other characters asking if he thought the indian character played with a plastic doll made to look like a businessman. I'd be honored to be considered heyoka for that: http://www.pantheon.org/articles/h/heyoka.html I like the idea of Heyoka or of being Heyoka -- although there's a difference between being and wishing. I guess I can count points in my favor for having had the idea and scribed it before ever hearing the word Heyoka. s. isaac dealey 954.522.6080 new epoch : isn't it time for a change? add features without fixtures with the onTap open source framework http://www.fusiontap.com http://coldfusion.sys-con.com/author/4806Dealey.htm ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~| Find out how CFTicket can increase your company's customer support efficiency by 100% http://www.houseoffusion.com/banners/view.cfm?bannerid=49 Message: http://www.houseoffusion.com/lists.cfm/link=i:5:165622 Archives: http://www.houseoffusion.com/cf_lists/threads.cfm/5 Subscription: http://www.houseoffusion.com/lists.cfm/link=s:5 Unsubscribe: http://www.houseoffusion.com/cf_lists/unsubscribe.cfm?user=89.70.5 Donations & Support: http://www.houseoffusion.com/tiny.cfm/54
